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I am a girl, therefore I'm worthless.
I am a disappointment to my parents.

I am a thing to be sold for profit.
I am property to a stranger.

I am a body used for the pleasure of men.
I am a slave to my promised husband.



"Yes, Sir."
"Yes, Mistress."

These are the only things I'm allowed to say.
If I say anything else I will be punished.

I shall face a punishment.
Several that no one should be allowed to face.



Beaten.
Molested.

Disposed of.
I fear all of it.

But sadly, it would be nothing new.
I shall be punished for simply taking a breath.



I wish to take my final one.
I "belong" in the kitchen, after all.

I have possession of the knife.
This decision shall finally be mine.

My fear melts away, and my neck turns cold.
I shall take my freedom...



Yes, I have taken it.
My freedom.

However, it was not by means of bloodshed.
It was not by means of "relief."

It was by means of struggle.
It was by by means of the impossible.



Fighting.



No longer shall I hide my face behind blue.
My hair shall be hidden because of God, not man.

I shall marry at a chosen age to a chosen man.
I shall learn through books and science.

I have the ability to do this all.
I am a girl, therefore I'm powerful.
...I SAW GIRL RISING AND HALF THE SKY AGAIN, OKAY!?

I decided to use a different formatting it add to the tone. I tried to put in different cultural difference, not focusing on the discrimination you find in the US, such as marrying off a twelve-year-old or molestation that is "fine" because of the culture. However, women are powerful and strong, no matter the age.

Several girls all around the world have fought for their freedom and to have their voice heard. Malala Yousafzai, for a younger example, allowed herself to be shot for what she believes in. 
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lightbleueyes Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2015  Student General Artist
Oh my gosh I love this so much! :) The last 6 lines are the best! :) 
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sadgyaru Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very inspiring *applauds*
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All-the-star-people Featured By Owner May 17, 2014   Writer
This is absolutely amazing! Great job!
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JadeWinchester Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Student Writer
Would you mind if I show this on Tumbr?
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TheMagnificentMorado Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I wouldn't mind at all!
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JadeWinchester Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Student Writer
OK thanks.
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JadeWinchester Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Student Writer
Awesome. It shows that us girls are not for men to use and abuse we were made to be our own person. We were made to be free and do what we want not what others want us to do.
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Butterscotch-Scythe Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Girl Rising <3 
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ksw97 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This reminds me of the book "Sold" great job on writing this very powerful!
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vanillamanila Featured By Owner May 5, 2014
Oh my gosh, I have that book and it's so sad but so powerful and uplifting and is an amazing message to girls all over the world.
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ksw97 Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Ikr?!
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ObsessivelyBlonde Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing. Truly amazing.
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KarKanZ Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
your gender doesn't make you powerful. your personality and interests do.

what is with that wonky spacing
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Adam-Walker Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014   Writer
"Women are powerful and strong" I have a number of female characters and they fit that category.
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Musicalkitty688 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's such a beautiful poem! 
This is pretty much the story of my life and it touched me.
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liamrowley Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
A nice little experimentation with form, pitty the message is so vacuous and contrived. 
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charminbluebell Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's.... that's so beautiful! Awww! That's just.... just amazing! I looooooooooove it!
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JennaJane Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So wonderful and empowering!

Since I am transgender, people act as though I do not understand things like this. 
But dammit, I'm so proud to be a strong woman. 
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elaaaaaaaa Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014
one woman screwed up this world?!?!? Surely you are not espousing the sexist myth of Eve and the fact that Adam was not responsible for his own choices.
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WhisperShade Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
One, it's not a myth. Two, while Adam was responsible for his own choices, so was Eve. She ate the fruit first. It's not sexist; it's just what happened. If you want to make this a debate over someone's beliefs, go ahead, but at least understand what the other person believes.
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Hazelfrost13 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really good poem!
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Ishamar Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
as long as more women stand up?
We will rule.
I love this!
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Cammie-Pink Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014   Artist
hm.. i can relate to this. I'm a woman and i know what it is like to be taken advantage of. but from now on, i will no longer let that happen to me.
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WhisperShade Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
Maia-chan, I think you just became dA famous.
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TheMagnificentMorado Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I bit.
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TheMagnificentMorado Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*A
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mmv303 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014
*sigh*
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amateur-assassin Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely :D
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Aristeides Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
People who mistreat others and walk all over them would still do it even if they were the other gender. Being a man doesn't mean you're a brutally powerful warlord or something. Everybody is looking to be "powerful" and everybody has a thousand excuses for their violent thoughts and deeds.
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KansasProjectSaint Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
A woman is indeed powerful, maybe even more than a man for what the female gender has had to go through over generatons. A woman is to be respected as a human being, a beautiful creature who has feelings, goals, & life expereinces. And while there may be times that we men feel that we cant live with you, it still is true to me that we cant live without you. :)
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pokemonpuppy23 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Beautiful!!!!
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RaraaAAvis Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
WoW...
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Levitating-Elephant Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow that was beautiful...

the meter of the poem is great, i love the way you have listed the things and made a comparison, i love the short, sharp and effective sentences and i love the emotive language! Great use of repetition and i really enjoyed the way you linked certain words! I think this is a really powerful poem to all of us not just women, or those being ill treated, it's a really beautiful poem to demonstrate the appreciation, we must all have and  in my opinion to remember that it is much more powerful when a girl accomplishes great things that when a boy does. 

I think you would inspire a lot of girls if this was ever properly published!! 
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Mckill316 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
YYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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LobotomyBunny Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
This actually was a breath of fresh air because I'm so very used to women complaining about how their treated in the U.S when actually we have it pretty good over here.  And yes it's true that other countries treat their women very badly.....but I can't help but wonder when I'm done reading this poem what it's purpose is?
 
    At first glance it seems your trying to empower the reader, but I personally don't relate to it, living in America, and being in no way abused. So, then it seems you must be empowering these girls in these other countries....but I doubt they'd get a chance to read it, understand it, and even if they did, what would they do with it? It's very dangerous for women to speak out against their oppressors in those countries where it's ok, to kill your wife if she disobeys you.  Like you said Malala Yousafzai got herself shot. For a young girl that can be very frightening. 

So I guess after that I could assume that this poem is trying to spread awareness? Which can be good...but it kind of reminds me of those people who post "care about the orphans in Uganda" all over face book. Yea, that's nice and all, but in the end it doesn't really do anything for the cause. Spreading awareness is good, if there is a game plan behind it, otherwise the reader sits back from your poem and goes "But what do you want me to do about it?" 

Not to mention, for the most part, in the U.S we get bombarded with causes all the time and people get swept away by them, because for the most part, the youth of the U.S is very tender of heart, and it wants to help people. But at some point, you have to step back and realize that we need to let other countries work out their own issues, especially since we have homeless, jobless, and starving people in our own country. 

But that doesn't mean we shouldn't care about what goes on in other countries. So for the sake of raising awareness for this issue, I thought the poem was very nice, it had a strong message, and I'm sure a lot of young women in my country don't realize this sort of thing still happens to women in other countries. 
 Still, it seemed to fall a little flat, and seemed confusing and maybe even a little unnecessary, since it's hard to see what it's purpose is.

Keep being passionate, and keep writing poetry <3 
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Sasameshiro22 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Perfectly said. I always say, if you're going to make a statement actually say something. I think the feminism is america is very unorganized and more bothersome. Not because what they're fighting for is wrong, but because it makes every women in America seem like a victim when there are women in other countries who could be killed for the stuff that these women preach about.For America, its like fighting to change peoples opinion more than fighting to earn a freedom.
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LobotomyBunny Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
  Truthfully for the most part, I don't consider modern day feminism, to be feminism at all. It just feels like an angry extremist group more then anything in our country. 
We should teach woman how to not be victims, not to teach them to hate and fear men. 
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Sasameshiro22 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree totally. Like everytime I say I wanna be a house wife, Someone on tumblr yells at me :U And someone argued with me about shaving. Like I wanna shave ; n ;
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LobotomyBunny Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Shaving? Someone got mad at you for shaving? sheesh. Also, I hate how they perpetuate the idea that having a baby and being a mother is somehow bad, and holds you back. There is nothing wrong with being a stay at home mom to love and care for a new life form that you brought into the world. My mother was a stay at home mom when I was little, and then she went on to get her masters and now she's a principal at a charter school. 
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Sasameshiro22 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, I don't like the total disregard for life. That's actually my dream to be a mother and have a simple life because that works for me ya know. I understand living out youth but having kids is not the end of your life. I have respect for women who are stay at home mothers because someone is there to be the nurturer for the kid. It's a very good thing to me, almost vital for kids to have there mother there a lot to be there for them. Also yes. Someone said on Tumblr, "women shouldn't have to shave to be pretty, all women need to stop shaving in order to please men." and I'm all like, "Not every women wants to shave to please men, a lot of women do it because they want to and they personally like the way it looks." Like if you don't wanna shave cool but I do :| then we had a whole argument and then she got on rape and abortion and I'm like okay I'm done.....
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LobotomyBunny Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
those conversation always seem to end up there huh 
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Sasameshiro22 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yep -_-
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DelusionsOfSquallor Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
I agree that women are pretty safe in the US in comparison to some other countries, but I believe it's still good to talk about and fix the problems that are still in it, even if they are less than those in other countries. I agree with you, though, that women and just everyone in the US should be more informed and realize what's going on in other countries. 
I also believe that, even though it can be really dangerous for women to stand up for their rights in some countries, lots of brave people can change things, like how institutional slavery was made illegal.  Poem or other media like this might inspire somebody to be brave like this, so I think it's good to have a lot of pieces like this written in hope of it reaching somebody. 
I'm sorry if I'm being annoyingly idealistic or anything or if I missed your point; this is pretty much the first discussion-like reply I posted on deviantart, and I'm just really passionate about this subject : )
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LobotomyBunny Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
I understand that it would be empowering to a woman in that situation...if that is, they got to read it. They probably speak a different language, and even if they did speak english, they would somehow have to be able to get on the internet and find it on deviantart, if they even have access to a computer, or even the internet.

   So I see it trying to reach a reader that it will ultimately never reach. So that's why I thought it fell flat. Because there's not much you and I, can take from it, and the girls that would, probably will never see it. 

I agree with you on every point, that this would be powerful if, it's message was delivered.  Maybe the author should try to get it translated into multiple languages and try to send it out into the world some how. With a much farther reach then deviantart. That's why I said it was good for spreading awareness but not much else. 
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pizzawhore Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist
"I am a girl, therefore I'm worthless.
I am a disappointment to my parents..."

You gotta snap out of it. If you keep telling that bullshit to yourself then you probably deserve it. You're not worthless. You're not a disappointment to your parents. And if they say so, they're a disappointment to the human race.

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CwieChanti Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student General Artist
you should REALLY read the description before you write something like that.
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pizzawhore Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist
What tells you I didn't read the description? I'm talking about the girls that actually believe that, that they "belong to the kitchen" because a misogynistic society and culture says so when they're capable of much more. "I am a body used for the pleasure of men." Lots 'a nope. A girl shouldn't feel like it. And if she does then I'd feel so fucking sorry for her.
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CwieChanti Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student General Artist
okay I'm sorry then...thought you meant just her...
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LobotomyBunny Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
This poem isn't about the AUTHOR. It's about girls in places like Islamic countries, where it's perfectly legal to kill your wife in cold blood for saying "no" to you, where men can marry and rape little girls and no one cares. Where it's ok to trade your daughter into slavery, and she's nothing more then and object. Where women can't go outside without a man, or they'll get thrown in prison. 

                    Maybe we have the luxury to feel and do whatever we want, but this poem is about girls who can't, because their government says so. Please think before write things. 
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PercyPo Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Fourth time: EQUALITY.

This is starting to get a little worn out. There are men who can respect women; not all are rapists or etc.

As for countries with women's rights issues; that's up to the people and government of that nation to change. You can lead a horse to water, but you can't make it drink.

Look around. Yes, there are still many places where women are discriminated against, but that number has shrunken down considerably.

If you want to make a difference, then get ready for the near impossible. It takes a lot of governmental power to make changes involving topics such as specific rights. And even still, you won't change all of the guy's minds in the world. You can try, but you will fail.

There will ALWAYS be bickering and opinionated people. There will always be people who are racist, there will always be people who decide to commit murder. There will always be men discriminating against women, and women who hate men.

THE END. Peace Let's go about creating some art or something.
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